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This is kind of nonsensical and I would like feedback if one may. The setting is of a vampire woman that was meant to be burnt by an executor, but then turned it around and, with a burst of almost-gon… Read More
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9m, 3w agoPosted 9 months, 3 weeks ago
This is kind of nonsensical and I would like feedback if one may. The setting is of a vampire woman that was meant to be burnt by an executor, but then turned it around and, with a burst of almost-gone strength, she burnt him instead. Best criticism gets the cookie. :)

And please don't correct my punctuation, just the non-poem "poem" :)

O no pressed expire instead of edit
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9m, 3w agoPosted 9 months, 3 weeks ago
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consume
maz888
That was a poem?
No it's a text, sorry to butcher "poem", just wanted to not be repetitive in that approach
Oh well, thanks for your post regardless of its indepth opinion.
Was she she only a small vampire thats why she only bit his knee whereas most vampires as we all know go for the neck

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#1
That was a poem?
#2
maz888
That was a poem?
No it's a text, sorry to butcher "poem", just wanted to not be repetitive in that approach

Oh well, thanks for your post regardless of its indepth opinion.

Edited By: consume on Sep 28, 2016 23:16: hu hum
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consume
maz888
That was a poem?
No it's a text, sorry to butcher "poem", just wanted to not be repetitive in that approach
Oh well, thanks for your post regardless of its indepth opinion.
Was she she only a small vampire thats why she only bit his knee whereas most vampires as we all know go for the neck
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archer1204
consume
maz888
That was a poem?
No it's a text, sorry to butcher "poem", just wanted to not be repetitive in that approach
Oh well, thanks for your post regardless of its indepth opinion.
Was she she only a small vampire thats why she only bit his knee whereas most vampires as we all know go for the neck
There's the thing, I actually wanted to put a small explanation for why she didn't do that. Did not go down.

Edited By: consume on Oct 31, 2016 04:09: ttt
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consume
archer1204
consume
maz888
That was a poem?
No it's a text, sorry to butcher "poem", just wanted to not be repetitive in that approach
Oh well, thanks for your post regardless of its indepth opinion.
Was she she only a small vampire thats why she only bit his knee whereas most vampires as we all know go for the neck
There's the thing, I actually wanted to put a small explanation for why she didn't do that. Did not go down. So alternatively I can assure you she didn't do that because he wore an executioner's helmet, which also covered his neck (chainmail). Seeing that he was wearing a full tunic below with no protection at all, she lunged in that direction and tore the cap.
i like chocolate chip :p
#6
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
#7
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
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archer1204
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
In all honesty, a game I was playing that had a vampire class in it and - you guessed it - the executioner. :{
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consume
archer1204
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
In all honesty, a game I was playing that had a vampire class in it and - you guessed it - the executioner. :{
I would never have guessed that by the way you can post it

Edited By: archer1204 on Sep 28, 2016 23:33
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archer1204
consume
archer1204
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
In all honesty, a game I was playing that had a vampire class in it and - you guessed it - the executioner. :{
I would never have guessed that by the way you can post it
Why, it's called Town of Salem. Basic and fun game. Heard of it?
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consume
archer1204
consume
archer1204
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
In all honesty, a game I was playing that had a vampire class in it and - you guessed it - the executioner. :{
I would never have guessed that by the way you can post it
Why, it's called Town of Salem. Basic and fun game. Heard of it?
No sorry what flavour is the cookie
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archer1204
consume
archer1204
consume
archer1204
consume
oO ok then. Ty for the insightful question :)
What was your inspiraton
In all honesty, a game I was playing that had a vampire class in it and - you guessed it - the executioner. :{
I would never have guessed that by the way you can post it
Why, it's called Town of Salem. Basic and fun game. Heard of it?
No sorry what flavour is the cookie
Oh go on then, 'tis a classic 1 from Tesco Sainbury's or Asda etc - chocolate chip. Enjoy and good night. :D

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