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    bg1: Any writers here? need critque

    need someone to critique some articles i've wrote.

    Im not a writer so i want to know if i have structured what i'm writing correctly, if it flows and comes across well.


    can you post here if you want to read it, if poss can you tell me what you have which makes you an ideal candidate to read it

    dont pm me, ill pm you

    thanks

    22 Comments

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    Have done a bit of writing BG1 - but I'm a harsh critic

    Original Poster

    ok andy thanks, still brushing it up a bit, will give you a pm, also can you ban nikkib123 as she pm me just for the reaon of pming me when i said do not pm me.

    I believe this is a breach or something or another

    black gerbil1

    ok andy thanks, still brushing it up a bit, will give you a pm, also can … ok andy thanks, still brushing it up a bit, will give you a pm, also can you ban nikkib123 as she pm me just for the reaon of pming me when i said do not pm me.I believe this is a breach or something or another



    From reading that sentence I do not have high hopes for your 'article'


    Never mind his second post, the first one's not so hot on the old English!
    Edited by: "moomintroll" 27th Mar 2011

    Banned

    black gerbil1

    ok andy thanks, still brushing it up a bit, will give you a pm, also can … ok andy thanks, still brushing it up a bit, will give you a pm, also can you ban nikkib123 as she pm me just for the reaon of pming me when i said do not pm me.I believe this is a breach or something or another



    Or you could just put a nasty message up about her on a review site instead if you're feeling really clever and hard!

    what's a critque brah?

    Banned

    What sort of article?

    Is it a news story, an editorial, or an advertorial or just some public interest copy-writing for a brochure or magazine.

    Edited by: "slamdunkin" 27th Mar 2011

    slamdunkin

    What sort of article an editorial and advertorial or just some public … What sort of article an editorial and advertorial or just some public interest copy-writing for a brochure or magazine.



    cbeebiesmagazine.com/

    Original Poster

    the writing is about public information.

    is it to do with spelling?

    Banned

    So it's informative rather the journalistic.

    and what would be the format and target demographic the publication is aimed at?

    Original Poster

    I just want to know if my writing flows, the underline message is getting across, Is there too much of one thing and not enough of something else. Just the intergirty of the writing peice, not bothred about spelling or gammer

    the demographic is EVERYONE.

    black gerbil1

    I just want to know if my writing flows, the underline message is getting … I just want to know if my writing flows, the underline message is getting across, Is there too much of one thing and not enough of something else. Just the intergirty of the writing peice, not bothred about spelling or gammerthe demographic is EVERYONE.


    not bothred about spelling or gammer
    just as well.

    Fancy asking for help with your GCSE course work

    Original Poster

    why are people on here so mean to other humans, i dont understand it

    Banned

    you can send it to me....I've had a book published that was ghost writen for me which sold over 100,000 copies....i'm not much of a speller, but my misses will proof read it for you if you like

    Original Poster

    hi slamdunk, what is this ghost written?

    http://i276.photobucket.com/albums/kk10/pauls7010/ATT16418.jpg

    Banned

    Ghost written means that an accomplished author took my story over a series of taped interviews and turned it into a book on my behalf. he then sent me the manuscripts for me to make any amendments to the story, which was then given to the publishing house and proof read, then returned to me for final approval before going to print.

    skusey





    X)

    black gerbil1

    why are people on here so mean to other humans, i dont understand it


    Not everyone. You mainly because you ask for it.

    I should try something else if I were you.

    Written English is obviously not your star subject.
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